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The table below shows the percentages of moblie phone owners using various mobile phone features from 2006 to 2010.

The table below shows the percentages of moblie phone owners using various mobile phone features from 2006 to 2010.
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The above table illustrates the comparison of different types of applications
usage
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 by people available in mobile phones from 2006-2010. the comparison is made for three consecutive years.
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, the features provided by the mobile phone in the present scenario are dynamic and unremarkable, by the information provided here we can tell that in 2006 we can see that mobile phones were used 100% for making phone calls and as it was the developing era when only the basic features like making calls, listening to music, communicating through texts and mail, playing games and recording video options were available, music and video were not utilized as there were lively happening activities. In 2006, there is a hike in playing games and a gradual increase in the applications like recording videos,playing music, surfing on the internet,and playing games.
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, we can summarise the illustration that the usage of various applications on mobile phones until 2010 had a rise.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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