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Some believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinion?

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It is often thought
robots
, which are artificially intelligent, will perform all the functions, which are actually done by humans anywhere all over the world.
This
 essay will discuss
this
 view, and I believe that nowadays
robots
 play a great role in our life, but humankind does an essential function in certain
jobs
, which cannot be neglected. At the outset, in our era, a lot of changes happen, particularly in developed countries,
as a result
 of the technology progress.
For example
, when intelligent
robots
 are manufactured, they exert a big difference in various fields, because they can do the same functions exactly as individuals.
In addition
 to that, if
robots
 are committed to carrying out specific missions, they will finish them rapidly with high accuracy.
For instance
, most large hospitals mainly depend on smart
robots
 to fill specific cabinets with medications, and after monitoring the process, they find out that
robots
 make a huge success in
this
 field.
Although
 these days smart
robots
 are commonly used,
instead
 of humans, there are certain
jobs
 that must be carried out by highly qualified persons.
Firstly
, regarding Pharmacy, a qualified pharmacist must give medications to any
patient
, as; he must explain to him the proper usage of these medications.
Moreover
, when the pharmacist talks to the
patient
 to get more information about his condition, he might discover medication errors,
then
; he will stop giving the medication to the
patient
, and he has to inform the doctor, but
this
 action cannot be performed by any robot, and if a robot gives the medication to a
patient
, he will be at risk. In conclusion, even though a wide spread of using
robots
 to do many
jobs
 because they save a lot of time, and money, there are some
jobs
 folk must do to avoid the occurrence of any risk that might happen
due to
 technical problems, which sometimes may happen during the work of
robots
, and result in a serious error.
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