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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#anthropology #graduates #university #course #salaries #anthropologists #work #five #years #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The pie chart
represent
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 information on
destinations
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the destinations
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 of anthropology
graduates
 from a particular University after
undergraduate
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an undergraduate
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 degree course.
Whereas
table
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the table
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 graph provides data on
income
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the income
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 of anthropologists after working for 5 years.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the majority of
graduates
 have
a
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apply
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full-time work and the salaries of government sector half workers
is
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 the highest
According to
 the pie
chart
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 more than
a
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apply
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half of
graduates
 have a full-time job, as was mentioned. The second biggest proportion
is owns
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 to part-time work, which is exactly 15%. Next is unemployed
graduates
that
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consider 12%
from
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 all. Full-time postgrad study
graduates
 and
not known
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graduates
,
however
, have the same percentage which is equal to 8%. The least percentage , though, is part-time work+ postgrad study, considering only 5%. Turning to the table graph, there are three types of employment. 5% of freelance consultants receive $25,000-49,999 ,
while
 40% receive more than $100,000.
Likewise
, 50% get more than 100,000. Private companies,
on the other hand
, give $25,000-49,999 for 10% of their workers. But the biggest percentage (35%) of workers there receive $50,000-74,999
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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