The chart and graph give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. Write a report for a university lectuer describing the information shown below.

The chart and graph give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. Write a report for a university lectuer describing the information shown below.
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The two charts given provide information about the worldwide distribution of sales and
share
prices for Coca-Cola from 1996 to 2001. The pie chart illustrates
volume
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the volume
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of Coca-Cola users in five specific regions,
while
the line graph
reveal
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the
share
price
over the given period.
Overall
, it is explicit that North America hold a lion’s
share
of
unit
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the unit
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case,
while
Africa and
Middle
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the Middle
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East hold a tiny fraction.
Also
, the figure for
Coca-Cola
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Coca-Cola's
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share
price
grew substantially in the past 5 years.
Firstly
, in 2000, Coco-Cola
is
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sold around 17,1 billion cases of total sales. The largest consumer was North America, which accounted for 30,4% of total users. Following by Latin America, as the
second ranked
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leader, constitute a quarter
for
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the figure. Europe and Asia took up 20,5 and 16,4, respectively. Of the five regions, Africa and
Middle
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the Middle
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East have the lowest proportion of Coca-Cola’s unit case volume. Since 1996,
the
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Coca-Cola’s division
price
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witnessed
a
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erratic pattern. Noticeably, the highest figures were recorded in mid-1998, at approximately 85$. After that peaked point, the figure of
share
price
dwindle to below 70$. Between mid-1998 and 2000, the
price
considerably dropped and
then
levelled off at around 60$.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words share, price with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • depict
  • illustrate
  • highlight
  • fluctuations
  • correlation
  • trends
  • overview
  • analysis
  • interpretation
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