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The table details the international tourist arrivals in millions in 8 countries in 2009 and 2010 and the changes (in percentage). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table compares the number of
tourists
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 arriving in 8 countries in 2009 and 2010. In general, tourism rose slightly in the United States, Spain, the UK, and Italy and increased dramatically in Turkey, China, and Germany. Figures fell in Hong Kong and were stable in France, which had the most
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overall
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. Looking first of all at France, numbers were unchanged at 76
million
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tourists
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 in both years. The United States increased by 1.5% from 66 to 67
million
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 and Spain followed a similar trajectory (55 to 56
million
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tourists
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).
Tourists
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 to the UK increased by double that rate (3.6%) and overtook Spain in 2010 by 1
million
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 visitors. In Italy, the rate of growth was slower at 2.3%, translating to an increase of 45
million
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. Turkey surged past Italy, rising 33% to 46
million
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. There were
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 significant increases in China, which went from 22 to 34
million
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 (a 55% growth), and Germany (a 109% expansion to 24
million
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). The lowest numbers were in Hong Kong as tourism fell by 11% to end at 9
million
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.

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