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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute jobs satisfaction ? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers ?

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These days,
people
 spend most of their time at the workplace.
Therefore
,
job
 satisfaction is essential because mental health is significantly related. We examine the factors that may increase
people
's
job
 satisfaction. Everyone knows that if a person is satisfied with his
job
, his performance will improve.
People
 often pay attention to interest first and
then
 to
income
 to choose a
job
.
However
, if
this
income
 is not profitable for them, their priority will change. Living costs are increasing daily, so
income
 can be one of the most critical factors for a comfortable life. The
work
 environment
conditions
also
 play an essential role in
people
's motivation to
work
.
For example
, if you are an employee whose
income
 remains constant without encouragement and promotion, you probably do not feel the need to
work
 hard.
Also
, if you know you will get a salary increase with regularity and high efficiency, you will
work
 harder. Many jobs are demanding and harmful;
for example
, doctors and nurses are constantly involved with much stress, construction workers may not be able to
work
 if something happens to them, or psychologists may have mental illnesses after a
while
.
Such
 jobs should have proper salaries because they are essential
people
 in society, and their working
conditions
 are challenging.
As a result
, many expectations are realistic.
However
, if the
conditions
 are very suitable, there are still
people
 whose criteria are different from others or beyond the employer's ability. The
conditions
 are compatible. So our expectations are only sometimes realistic.
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