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some people believe in the right to freedom of speech. others believe in cesorship. disscuse both views and give your opinion

#people #right #freedom #speech #cesorship #disscuse
Although
 it is often argued that it certainly cannot deny that
people
 have the right of expressing their opinions freely, other
people
 believe that they should supervise all their
opinion
 before publishing
it
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 on any platform. In my
opinion
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 it is crucial that any kind of
opinion
 expressing should be censored. So
that
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I totally agree with that view.
Firstly
, every person has the right to express his
opinion
 freely and safely.
Since with his
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opinion
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 he can aware the
people
 about something
mistake
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mistakes
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 they should
notify
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themnotify
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, or they must stop doing wrong
behavior
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behaviour
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. For
people
 in Us always
trying
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totrying
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 make campaigns
for
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to
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 stop eating
meats
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, since
it
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that way
Humens
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humans
 are hurting animals. But the
on the other hand
 there
is
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are
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 enormous
people
 trying to publish the wrong behaviors
such
 as cruelty and violence. So
that
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I totally disagree with that view.
Moreover
, the government and high authorities should observe all
kind
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kinds
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 of
people
 who
are
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apply
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effect
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affect
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on
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apply
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the
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apply
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society positively and negatively.
For instance
, the political publisher and
newspapers
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newspaper
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 sections in Egypt
they
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apply
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should have an approval certificate before making any step or
separate
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separating
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 any news. So
that
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I totally believe that all sectors which
is
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are
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 responsible for public awareness or
effecting
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affecting
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on
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other
people
 should be under
eye
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the eye
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.
to conclude
, I agree that, nowadays there
is
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are
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 many awful
people
 who are seeking for destroying
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the country
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country
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country's
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 stability by their wrong considerations and religions through newspapers or website platforms. So that all
kind
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kinds
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 of online and offline social media must
supervised
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be supervised
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 by
government
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the government
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 and special observers
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