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t is good for university students to take part in part time job. To what extent you agree or disagree?

#university #students #part #time #job
Many students today prefer to take their part of the
time
 to work in some jobs ,
whereas
 a lot of people don't agree with
this
 thinking for many reasons in my essay
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 will explore both views.
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 firmly believe every individual should have worked where is he a student or not to cover his needing things every month, especially the people who live in the house they want to pay rent and bought the daily purchases,
Moreover
 living in the modern city with the highest prices with staff need a strong budget to cant any one life in it without salary income ,
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 many students improved the significant skills
such
 as
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 talking with the public to find a good relationship,
also
 communication with others improving confidence to able to start working with many different varieties of person to know many of cultures.
On the other hand
 ,most viewers
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 that thinking about two things make student confused about them ,how controlling
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time
 will be more hardly because the body should have to relax during the day
likewise
 the mind needs
time
 to understand and do the important process
while
 the day. Sometimes
time
 the examination should have a long
time
 to focus and the student will be all the
time
 thinking about these influencing them to bad results. In conclusion, improving skills is most important because that leads students the opportunity to have more soft and essential personal skills to build a personality to have a sunrise future I completely agree with
this
 opponent.
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