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Open plan office no walls no barriers. Research has shown that the transportation of products and people are the main source of pollution. Some people believe government should be in charge of this, while others believe it is the fault of individuals. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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It is considered that the logistic services and people are the main cause of
pollution
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.Whilst some people are of the opinion that
authourities
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authorities
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ressponsible
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responsible
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,others believe that it is
fault
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the fault
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 of individuals.
To
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 my point of view,it is certainly
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the ressponsibility
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ressponsibility
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responsibility
 of each
person
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.
This
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 essay will discuss both views and will argue in favour of the latter.
To begin
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 with,if each
person
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 had taken
a
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apply
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responsibility for
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pollution
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the pollution
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 we would not have faced
such
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 tremendous problems with ecology.
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,if each
person
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try
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 to make our world clearer,the world
wil
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will
 get rid of
pollution
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.The global level of
pollution
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formed
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is formed
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 from
litter
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 thrown by each
person
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.
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,how we can stop
pollution
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 of the Earth if we continue to
litter
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 on the streets for
instant
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an instant
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.
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Therefore
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 we by ourselves ought to give an impact
in
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on
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 developing
situation
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To sum up
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,if we personally do our best we will certainly solve
this
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problem
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.
On the other hand
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,
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government
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the government
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 need to take the
situatuion
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situation
to
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under
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 their control.
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,
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government
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the government
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 can make
profound
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a profound
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 impact by organising some events to clear the city.
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,authorities surely have enough resources to solve the
problem
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,given the fact that they can put buildings where
litter
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 can be reproduced,
also
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 they can increase
level
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the level
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 of awareness.
In addition
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,
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government
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the government
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 can introduce
the
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a
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 fee
of
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for
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 littering on the streets,
thus
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citizenz
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citizens
citizen
 would
afraid
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be afraid
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 to throw
a
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apply
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litter
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.
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,authorities can supply rewards for people that helped with clearing.
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,
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government
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the government
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 has an enormous amount of ways how to solve the
problem
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. In conclusion,
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government
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the government
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 has a vast number of opportunities to reduce the level of
pollution
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,
hovewer
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however
 if each individual
try
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tries
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 to
imapct
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impact
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problem
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,it will be more impact than .
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i
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I
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 am of the opinion that it is certainly
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the ressponsibility
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ressponsibility
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responsibility
 of each
person
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.Let`s make our world clearer,by trying to do it ourselves.
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