Students leave high school without learning the way how to manage their money. What are the reasons and solutions of this issue?

It is said
students
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school
without learning the method
how
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of how
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to manage their financial aspect. There are many reasons why
children
leave high
school
without
learing
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learning
how to manage their
money
including,
school
curriculum
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not have materials about financial
management
,
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and
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a lack of
awareness
among
children
about
value
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the value
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of
money
,
however
there
some
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are some
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measures to
addressing
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address
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this
issue including, introduce a new subject in
school
about
money
management
, raise the
awareness
among
children
about
value
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the value
show examples
of
money
. On the one hand, the primary reason why
children
leave high
school
without learning the way how to manage their
money
is
curriculum
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the curriculum
a curriculum
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of
school
only
concentrate
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in
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certain subjects. To illustrates,
the
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apply
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most
of
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school
curriculum
concentrate
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to educate their pupils about science, technology,
business
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and business
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, which means
school
do not pay attention to
teach
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teaching
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students
about financial
management
.A lack of
awareness
among
children
about
value
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the value
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of
money
is another reason why
Students
leave
school
without learning about how to manage their
money
.
For example
,
the
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apply
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most
of
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children
think the
money
should spend on
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the present
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moment namely, entertainment ,food,
video
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and video
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games rather than
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saving
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the
money
for future.
On the other hand
, there are several solutions to tackle
this
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issue
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.
This
first effective measure, the
school
should introduce a new subject in their
curriculum
about financial
management
in order to
teache
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teach
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students
about the strategies
spend
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their
money
wise way. The second solution,
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governments should launch educational campaigns in order to raise
awareness
among
children
about
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the values
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values
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value
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of
money
.
For instance
, Saudi Arabia
offer
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offers
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many financial
management
workshops in every
school
in all
reigon
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regions
region
of the country.
To sum up
, There are several reasons why
students
leave secondary
school
without
learing
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learning
the method how to manage their
money
namely , lack of materials
on
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in
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school
about financial
management
,
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and
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children
unaware
about
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of
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value
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the value
show examples
of
money
,
however
, there
some
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are some
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steps to deal with
this
problem including, introduce
a new materials
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new materials
a new material
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in
school
about financial
management
, raise the
awareness
among
children
about
value
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the value
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of financial aspect.
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