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You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in hospital, telling him about the match. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, tell him which team won describe the conditions on the day say how you felt about the match

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Dear John, Hope you're recovering from the injuries! I was afraid to hear about your accident a day before our semi-final. Anyways, I'm sure that you're aching to know about our match against
Sunriser
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Sunrise
. Like you, everybody was excited to know the
name
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 of the final teams who would be competing with each other in
next
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the next
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 month. You'll be happy to know that our team won
this
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 match with 6-5 scores. Let me explain
you
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to you
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 in detail. In the first half of the match, we were
loosing
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losing
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 with 2 scores only;
however
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, after 15 minutes of break, the rain started heavily.
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, the match stopped in between, but after an hour, it restarted again and in the meanwhile. we made a plan to win. We decided to change the position of Johny with Mohit, resulting in increasing the scores at
end
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. Though everybody played well, I think we need to practice more as it was a close escape from defeat.
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,
match
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the match
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 was interesting, but if you
were
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had been
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 there, you would have
been
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enjoyed it. We really missed you on the field. All team members are waiting for you to recover quickly because we have to win
this
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 final match. Get well soon! Yours lovingly, Ammy
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grammar
Try to avoid minor grammatical errors. For instance, 'we were loosing with 2 scores only' should be 'we were losing by 2 points.'
grammar
Ensure to maintain consistent tense throughout the letter.
content
The letter covers all the points mentioned in the prompt effectively.
tone
The writing tone is very suitable for the context and shows empathy towards the friend in the hospital.
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