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The chart below gives information about species used for animal testing in the U.S. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about species used for animal testing in the U.S. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart shows details about breeds utilized for animal experimentation in the U.S
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Overall
,
it is clear that
,
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 the greatest amount of animals
which
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used for testing are rabbits,
whereas
 sheep seem to share
minimal
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result
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results
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. At the outset, animal checking which
are
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 taken in
US
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the US
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, comprises six vary animals and
due to
 the given points, rabbits are chosen mostly with 38.7%.
Secondly
,
it
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followed by hamsters which seem taken into account a bit more than a quarter.
Furthermore
, pigs and primates show almost the same outcomes(9-9.3%) in
this
 wildlife trial process,
as well as
this
 testing is done on 10.2% of dogs.
On the other hand
, the least result belongs to sheep with
its
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minimal score.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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