Some people think university education is to prepare students for employment. Other people think university has other functions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some individuals think
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level of
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is helping to prepare
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for employment,
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others
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citizens believe
university
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education
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has other functions. I totally agree that
college
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a college
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education
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has other
fuctions
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functions
such
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as obtaining
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level of
education
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to
provided
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an ethical service. One of the
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university
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functions is to obtain academic
education
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base
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on facts to help
students
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become wiser when making decisions at work.
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, the two years of third
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is
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basic
on
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general knowledge
such
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as English, Psychologist, Math, and so on.
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,
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aquiered
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acquire
acquired
critical thinking skills
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on reliable facts and they have the belief of working
under
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higher
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educational level.
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, in
California
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most
of
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the
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college
students
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need to take general
education
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classes for two years before getting into
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, and these allow them to reduce the high cost of
univeristy
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university
. Another
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function is to guide
students
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become
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an ethical workers
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ethical workers
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to avoid unfairness
while
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providing a service.
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with, knowing
on
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what is right or wrong under the law will provide these
students
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to behave in a justice way to protect those who are less
prepare
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in life. More importantly, If an unfair situation is encountered by these
students
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at work, they will know how to properly address the situation without any supervision. To explain
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, nowadays all over the world, society needs more ethical workers who know how to react when an unfair situation is happening because many employees suffer from having an
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interview when
appliying
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applying
for a job.
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, I strongly
belief
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university
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education
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has other functions than
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preparing
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students
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for employment because
university
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classes are
focus
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focused
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on academic subjects to help
students
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develop critical skills to conduct themselves in an
appropiate
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appropriate
behaviour.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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