You have bought a new camera but when you got it home you found it had some problems. You returned the camera and spoke to the company representative a week ago but the camera has still not been repaired. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: Introduce yourself Explain the situation Say what action you would like the company to take

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Dear Sir, I am writing to ask you about the testing and repair of a SONY digital

camera

which I

brought

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bought

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a week

before

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ago

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. I am Tom, a regular customer of your company.I've already

brought

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bought

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a couple of digital products

such

as two smartphones, a laptop, a digital

camera

etc. The

camera

I sent to your customer service centre for repair

last

Monday was the second one, which was just

brought

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one week ago. Unfortunately, when I brought it back to my house, I found it

doesn't

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work available

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. As a regular customer of your company, I didn't doubt the product and didn't test it at your counter that day.

This

digital

camera

is prepared for our family trip next month. My wife is still willing to take it to record magnificent landscapes and personal memory pictures.

However

, It has already been over a week currently. I'd like to get a certain time for my

camera

,please. We are concerned that our original plan could be disturbed. Please let me know what you plan as soon as possible and do

further

discussion. Yours sincerely, Tom.

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task response

The letter does not fully address all aspects of the task. The situation is explained but the desired action is not clearly stated.

coherence and cohesion

The greeting and closing could be more formal and professional to suit the context of a letter to a company representative.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

185 words

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