Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions. Do you agree or disagree?

Developing technologies change
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to handwriting, reading books,
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information. In the present age, whether maintaining public
libraries
provides more benefits than seems just a waste of money has sparked much debate. Modern computer technology replaces library functions.
For instance
, John (who is a scientist in microbiology) wants to find a monograph
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virology. He can spend two hours on the way to the library and returning and at least 20 min to find the unnecessary book. Add to
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to return the book.
In contrast
, John can use the internet, use search sources and in a few minutes find the necessary information from
this
monograph.
Thus
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libraries
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procedure. Time is the most expensive thing, so maintaining state
libraries
is a waste of money in the contemporary world.
In contrast
, we should value buildings with books, as Mark Avrelius said it is a castle of knowledge. Computers,
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, etc. start to destroy
this
castle.
Libraries
are places where people can feel calmness and wisdom. In case we avoid visiting
such
places, we avoid ourselves
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and wisdom. Convincing arguments can be made about
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benefits. It’s about working.
Libraries
closing will lead to job loss. That can have a negative influence on the economic situation because of the increase in unemployment.
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I firmly believe modern society needs to balance between both critical points. The key is to save public
libraries
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but to decrease
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amount
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qualified useful work.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • repositories of books
  • promoting literacy
  • community engagement
  • equal access to information
  • digital divide
  • accessibility issues
  • personalized assistance
  • educational programs
  • cultural events
  • safe spaces
  • community meetings
  • tactile experience
  • preserving historical documents
  • important cultural repositories
  • fostering a sense of community
  • communal hubs
  • serene and focused environment
  • conducive to study and reflection
  • irreplaceable value
  • distracted environment
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