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Some people say its lot to tell about a person’s culture and character from their clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #person’s #culture #character #clothes
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As the expanse of modernisation is overhauling each sphere of life, the dynamics
dressing
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of dressing
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 have altered too. A section of
community
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the community
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 vehemently
deem
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 that the way a
person
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 is
dressred
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dressed
 represents the nature and
culture
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 of that
person
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.
Although
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this
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 statement is controversial, I have to concur that it is wrong to judge
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 individual from one's
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, let us unfurl it in
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 in subsequent paragraphs. Tacitly, a plethora o factors are predominant that dressing is based on
preferances
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preferences
not
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 on
culture
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 on character. First and foremost, when someone
move
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 to a new nation it is natural to wear dresses which resemble
to
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local
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the local
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 community. To clarify, as it is hard to adjust somewhere overseas, everyone like to do
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a thing
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thing
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as
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in
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 the new community and try to fit in and
clothes
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 are part of it, because if
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person
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a person
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whill
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will
 dress up as their own
culture
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 one might feel different and isolated from the local people. To exemplify, Sir Sigmund Freud, an eminent psychologist in his study of human behavior and cognitive skills has
assereted
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asserted
 that when a
person
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wear
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 something as per their taste, feels confident and supportive.
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, there can be a time when a
person
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 might miss
juged
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judged
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due to
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 the way of
dressin
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dressing
dressin'
. To elaborate,
sometime
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 a
person
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have
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 to wear
clothes
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 directly opposite to their nature, tradition, and
culture
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due to
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 their working conditions or the situations, so it does not means that
clothes
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 can represent
somene's
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someone's
 personality and background. To illustrate, a survey conducted by the United States Census Bureau in 2002 in
california
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California
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 over a group of 2000 people ranging from 20-30 years
age
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of age
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 clearly revealed that 40% of
individual
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individuals
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 have to put on dresses which are inappropriate as per their
culture
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 and status.
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, it can be said that
although
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 one wears something as per their
culture
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,
importance
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the importance
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 of
situation
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the situation
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 and surrounding can not be neglected.
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