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Some people say its lot to tell about a person’s culture and character from their clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #person’s #culture #character #clothes
As the expanse of modernisation is overhauling each sphere of life, the dynamics
dressing
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 have altered too. A section of
community
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 vehemently
deem
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 that the way a
person
 is
dressred
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dressed
 represents the nature and
culture
 of that
person
.
Although
this
 statement is controversial, I have to concur that it is wrong to judge
a
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 individual from one's
clothes
, let us unfurl it in
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 in subsequent paragraphs. Tacitly, a plethora o factors are predominant that dressing is based on
preferances
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preferences
not
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 on
culture
 on character. First and foremost, when someone
move
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 to a new nation it is natural to wear dresses which resemble
to
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local
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the local
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 community. To clarify, as it is hard to adjust somewhere overseas, everyone like to do
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a thing
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thing
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things
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as
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in
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 the new community and try to fit in and
clothes
 are part of it, because if
person
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a person
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whill
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will
 dress up as their own
culture
 one might feel different and isolated from the local people. To exemplify, Sir Sigmund Freud, an eminent psychologist in his study of human behavior and cognitive skills has
assereted
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asserted
 that when a
person
wear
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 something as per their taste, feels confident and supportive.
Moreover
, there can be a time when a
person
 might miss
juged
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judged
judge
due to
 the way of
dressin
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dressing
dressin'
. To elaborate,
sometime
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 a
person
have
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 to wear
clothes
 directly opposite to their nature, tradition, and
culture
due to
 their working conditions or the situations, so it does not means that
clothes
 can represent
somene's
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someone's
 personality and background. To illustrate, a survey conducted by the United States Census Bureau in 2002 in
california
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California
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 over a group of 2000 people ranging from 20-30 years
age
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of age
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 clearly revealed that 40% of
individual
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individuals
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 have to put on dresses which are inappropriate as per their
culture
 and status.
To conclude
, it can be said that
although
 one wears something as per their
culture
,
importance
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the importance
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 of
situation
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the situation
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 and surrounding can not be neglected.
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