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currently there is a trend towards the use o alternative medicine. However, at best these mothods are ineffective, and at worst they may be dangerous. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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The economy of most countries is based on the medical industry. Pharmaceutical communities and the medical industry will always accompany our societies.
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, the latest years a huge development occurs in different methods
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 as pills made from plants and herbs, and some new physical techniques used by different doctors.
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, I strongly believe, that alternative methods may be better for human health, as they give you solutions with no artificial techniques.
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, not all illnesses can disappear through these different processes.
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, pharmaceutical labs and medicine communities, don't give access to pills or schemes that can be helpful, and
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, people die from various types of cancer. I know that in Switzerland there is a place for different methods against various types of cancer. So, people can apply for therapy, but the cost is very high and insurance companies and governments don't give help.
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, you have to stay there, for two or three months, and
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 will be repeated every year, until the end. I strongly believe that alternative medicine must use carefully, and if there is a choice of making a combination with subsisting one, to give better results.
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, doctors, biologists, chemistries and pharmaceutical industries have to take advantage of each two issues and make a step forward for something that will give new fordable opportunities for everyone’s health.

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