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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average numbers of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average numbers of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.
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The line graph and table illustrate the breakdown of monthly recordings of the centigrade and the total no. of
hours
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 the sunlight per annum in
London
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, New York and
Sydney
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen clearly that every year in January, the temperature of
Sydney
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 is higher,
whereas
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 the climate of
London
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 is very low relative to other countries.
Accordingly
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,
Sydney
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 is getting a higher centigrade approximately a quarter.
While
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London
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 has a low temperature of below five
degrees
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 in the month of January. Over the period of twelve months, it is increasing gradually and peaks to slightly below 30
degrees
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,
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 it drops to five
degrees
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 Celsius in the month of December. In the same way, New York
also
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 records the same quantity of
degrees
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 Celsius which are about to
London
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 temperatures. As coming to the sunshine, New York has more no. of
hours
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 than
Sydney
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,
London
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 2,535
hours
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whereas
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London
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 has very fewer
hours
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 compared to other countries.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, london, sydney, degrees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperatures
  • annual sunshine hours
  • temperature fluctuation
  • degrees Celsius/Fahrenheit
  • climatic patterns
  • geographical location
  • seasonal variation
  • meteorological data
  • inhabitants' lifestyle
  • tourism industry
  • seasonal activities
  • thermal comfort
  • climate zone
  • sunlight exposure
  • weather trends
  • correlation
  • biodiversity
  • eco-system
  • temperate climate
  • tropical climate
  • desert climate
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