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some people believe that if is best to accept a bad situation. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Disscuss both views and draw you opinion

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The issue of accepting an awful
situation
instead
 of trying to tackle it has sparked heated controversy, with the opponents maintaining that if someone experiences a bad
situation
, it should remain unchanged, whilst the supporters claim that we should handle the issue and enhance it. Personally,
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 support the latter even though the former has some positive attributes. First of all, it is often argued that people who choose to stay in an unpleasant set of circumstances experience a continuous state of depression. Indeed, it is widely known that a bad
situation
 causes unpleasant feelings in the person that experiences it.
For instance
, a recent study revealed that individuals that avoid getting away from their comfort zones and facing a problem are more prone to experience psychological problems. Another point in support of my opinion is that a bad
situation
 includes serious repercussions. Admittedly, when a human being is procrastinated and avoids tackling their difficulties is in a bad mood constitutionally and has mood swings during the day.
Therefore
, they become isolated and sometimes they commit suicide.
However
, it is claimed that individuals who choose to remain in a
situation
that is
 troublesome are afraid of losing their comfort zone and they live peacefully. Admittedly, it is difficult to get away from the ordinary in order to improve a
situation
.
For example
, the majority of people are not succeeding in their life be it in their personal life or career level for the reason that they are not fans of change. Yet
this
 is not entirely true since every start is hard but if a person overcomes a problem automatically feels better than before. All things considered,
although
 it is effortless for society to choose the easy path and have a specific routine, I firmly believe that people should be open to challenges and face their problems , only
then
 they do a positive step forward in mankind.
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