The graph below shows the percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features in Vietnam in the year 2005, 2008, 2010.

The graph below shows the percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features in 

Vietnam in the year 2005, 2008, 2010.
The table illustrates the proportion of people using their phones for different functions in the year 2005,2008 and 2010 in VietNam
It is clear that
most of the
figure
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in the table decreased in the
last
year except for
take
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photos data.
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,
almost
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most
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cellphone
user
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users
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utilising
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their phone to make calls over the period shown. In 2005, the number of people
used
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phones to take phones rose slightly from 65% to 70% in 2008 and
then
continued to grow to 77%
at the end
of the period.
However
,in 2005 the percentage of phone users for record audio dropped sharply from 78% to 63% in 2010. Out of the other features,the percentage of phone users
made
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calls
that
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remained at 100% in 2005 and 2008,before falling slightly to 97% in 2010.Meanwhile,send & receive text messages version was the second most popular function in 2005 with 82%,before gradually decreasing to only 68% in 2010
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