The graph below shows the percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features in Vietnam in the year 2005, 2008, 2010.

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The table illustrates the proportion of people using their phones for different functions in the year 2005,2008 and 2010 in VietNam

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most of the

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in the table decreased in the

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year except for

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photos data.

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cellphone

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their phone to make calls over the period shown. In 2005, the number of people

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phones to take phones rose slightly from 65% to 70% in 2008 and

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continued to grow to 77%

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of the period.

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,in 2005 the percentage of phone users for record audio dropped sharply from 78% to 63% in 2010. Out of the other features,the percentage of phone users

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calls

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remained at 100% in 2005 and 2008,before falling slightly to 97% in 2010.Meanwhile,send & receive text messages version was the second most popular function in 2005 with 82%,before gradually decreasing to only 68% in 2010

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The graph below shows the percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features in Vietnam in the year 2005, 2008, 2010.

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

You learned the news from your friend regarding a part-time job at a new international company near your house. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter, you should: explain why you need that job give details of what you can do for the company suggest the time that you can work.

It is more important for school children to learn about their local history than the world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Wrirte about the following topic: In many countries today, there are people living on or below the poverty line. Why is this the case? What can be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. do you agree or disagree?