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some people think that modern invention have more problem as compared to their benefits .do you agree or disagree?

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In today's era with the improvement of technology there is
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variety of inventions that can
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 many people agree that high benefits are more than negative in
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there are many creating and invention devices that make a big shift in our
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 the utilize for things be easier
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 the communication between countries is able for each one has internet, modern created but the global in one village with extremely services.
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 declined value that leads impact all socialization respectively economic and the lifestyle of individual's, morals the senses around the nature is completely change ,To be ,honest I more agree with the second believing because I don't like on my aged going with today speed I need to test the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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