Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are many reasons why several
schools
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allowed pupils
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their
phones
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during learning activities.
Although
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children
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might lose focus in classrooms, I believe that they
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are allowed
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to bring their
phones
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due to
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safety
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. On the one hand, in learning schemes,
phones
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make
kids
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easily distracted as they contain games that
addictive
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are addictive
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.
Moreover
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,
children
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nowadays very excel in accessing information and in operating their
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smartphones
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phones
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. It could
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them in not only giving attention to their teachers
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but
also
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doing something
inapproproate
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inappropriate
.
In addition
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,
kids
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do not have
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a sense
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of responsibility and good emotional management. To illustrate, there is a pupil who record a teacher
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teaching and it went viral on social media, it
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against
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teachers
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rights by sharing their privacy.
Furthermore
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, it could
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that
forbiding
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forbidding
children
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to use
phones
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in
school
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the school
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environment could lighten teacher’s
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jobs
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.
On the other hand
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, allowing
kids
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to bring
phones
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to
schools
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has,
therefore
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, been implemented as a policy that would help teachers’ workforce. If
kids
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using
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their
phones
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in
schools
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, it would be easy for them to communicate with their parents. Nowadays, there are many criminal activities targeting pupils, and indeed
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parents are worried
concerning
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about
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this
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issue. The majority of
schools
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in Asia,
for instance
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, support
children
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to bring their
phone
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phones
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, even though they did not agree with that in the first place. The reason
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that is
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the parents there gather to
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and argued
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schools
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due to
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childrens’
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safety.
Consequently
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, the
schools
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agree as it could prevent any crimes that might happen to pupils. In conclusion,
while
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phones
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could make students distracted, it enables them to contact their family regarding
to
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their condition and position. I share the same opinion with that as
schools
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unable
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are unable
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ensuring
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to ensure
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students’ safety.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distraction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Concentration
  • Emergency communication
  • Digital literacy
  • Educational resources
  • Social development
  • Self-regulation
  • Enforcement
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Technology access
  • Learning apps
  • Screen time
  • Peer interaction
  • School policy
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