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people naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kind of problems of problems can this cause? Whats solutions you can suggest?

#people #changes #lives #whats
It is considered that
people
 avoid
changes
 in their lives.In
this
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i
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 will discuss problems connected with the statement and will propose some solutions to solve
this
 problem.
To begin
 with,
changes
 it is the main source of progress.
For example
,if you stay at the static position you will not improve physically and mentally.
Changes
 are challenges for us,something
what
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 is unusual helps our brain to get ready for other wars in the future time.
Secondly
,
changes
 make our
life
 much more fascinating.
For instance
,if many years ago
people
 had not tried to change everything,we would have now lived in
tedious
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the tedious
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 and ordinary world.
Moreover
,simply living by schedule makes your
life
 monotonous.
Furthermore
,
people
 might see you as a boring person,
due to
 the fact that society demands
for
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activities and new challenges,
otherwise
 as
i
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 said
life
 would be tedious.
To sum up
,resisting making
changes
 will cause a lot of problems. First of all,
people
 should stop
afraiding
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raiding
afraid
changes
.
For example
,my brother
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afraided
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afraid
 of
changes
 so much
so
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that
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 he lost all of his friends and his girlfriend.There is red herring that if you try to change anything,you will lose everything that you have.No!Under no circumstances should you be terrified of
this
.
In addition
,
people
 need to go to mental health
centre
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.
For instance
,many
people
 go to psych and it really helps them.If you do not want to make
changes
,it might be
psychological
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 illness or complex,
thus
 you need to go to
psychologist
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a psychologist
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.
To conclude
,you need to do something to deal with avoiding
changes
 in
life
. In conclusion,resisting
changes
 is
serious
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 mental problem and you seriously ought to deal with that.
For
example
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 go to psych and so on.Do not be afraid of
changes
 and believe in yourself!
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • resistance to change
  • stagnation
  • personal growth
  • miss out on
  • opportunities
  • experiences
  • career advancement
  • professional development
  • strain
  • personal relationships
  • conflicts
  • fear of the unknown
  • lack of adaptability
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