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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today Sunrise information by selecting a reporting the main features and make comparisons relevant

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The diagrams illustrate the development that has taken place in Grange
Park
 since 1920 when it was opened.
It is clear that
 a lot of changes have been made during
this
 period including new buildings and Recreation facilities. there was an
entrance
 named Arnold Avenue on the North side and from Eldon Street on the south side. there was a fountain in the middle of the
park
 with the stage for musicians situated on the left, a glasshouse to the right
entrance
, and a pond for water plants in the upper right-hand corner around the edges of the
park
 there were rose gardens with seats. The
park
 has altered considerably since
then
. now there is a large Rose
Garden
 in the
center
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 of the
park
 with seats around it. A playground replaced by Pond and a nice water features has been built on the rights of
this
entrance
. there is an
amphitheater
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 for concerts on the left, with a rose
garden
 next to it. another Rose
Garden
 which was next to the north
entrance
 demolished and a cafe has been built
instead
. The
park
 has changed significantly for the better
although
, the simple structures remain
such
 as rose
garden
 seats and entrances.
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