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Over the last few years, there has been a dramatic increase in the price of energy for a variety of reasons. This has caused many people to be affected by "fuel poverty". Outline the situation and problem of fuel poverty. Then find some solutions to improve the problem and evaluate these solutions.

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Several factors have contributed to the substantial rise in
energy
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 prices over the past few years. Many
people
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 are now experiencing "
fuel
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poverty
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"
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 of
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According to
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 Jones, (2023) Being unable to spend enough money to heat your
home
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 sufficiently is known as
fuel
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poverty
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. Low income, high
fuel
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 prices, and inefficient
energy
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 use are the root causes. İt is known that living in cold and damp places has some problems.
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, the problem is without
Insulation
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 homes, In a study by Lynos (2023), a
home
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 with a lack of
insulation
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 can cost €1,368 more to heat annually than a
home
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 with enough
insulation
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.
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, The main factor behind rising
energy
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 bills is the rising cost of polluting forms of
energy
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 like gas and oil.
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,
people
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 need fair pricing for
fuel
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.
According to
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, Nickless (2023) the price of
energy
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 decreases as you consume more of it under the current pricing system.
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, individuals with the lowest earnings pay the highest
energy
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costs
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 since they consume the least,
while
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 the rest of us pay the bill for the rich's expensive lifestyle.
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, the first possible solution, The £360 increase in the typical
energy
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 bill over the past ten years was mainly
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 the increased cost of gas. The only option to permanently reduce
costs
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 is to quickly switch from fossil fuels to clean, renewable
energy
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 produced by the sun, wind, and waves. The second possible solution is using a fair pricing system,
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 Nickless (2023),
this
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 would lower the
costs
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 of supplying the essential
energy
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 needed for cooking, heating, and lighting
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also
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 acknowledging that these needs ought to be treated as human rights.
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,
According to
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 Winser (2023), artificial intelligence can now be an essential tool in the struggle against
fuel
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poverty
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. The project uses modern Al software to combine data from several sources.
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 data is displayed in a simple way that highlights which houses in London and the southeast of England could require more help.
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 but not least, To assist minimize
energy
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 waste and reduce
costs
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, the government ought to sponsor a street-by-street
insulation
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 program.
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, Sandiford and McRae (2023) estimate that 8.4 million
people
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 will be living in
fuel
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poverty
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 by the time
costs
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 rise in April 2023, a rise from the charity National
Energy
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 Action's (NEA) current estimate of 6.7 million. There are a lot of
people
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 who are suffering and the biggest help should come from governments.
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 Lynos (2023), Nobody ought to be forced to decide between heating their
home
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 and putting food on the table.
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 should
also
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 involve help from the government for those in need.
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