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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#countries #money #poverty #aid
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it is often argued that wealthy
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money
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suffering
 from poverty,
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 to poor states. In
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developed
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provide
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poor
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money
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 and recycle it to earn more
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however
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toward
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 is not remain
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management
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, Japan after
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had been
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 their educational sectors. nowadays Japan from the
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country
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donations in the right sectors
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, there are enormous methods development
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educational
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 are really crucial
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 because the development of any
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 is rely on the
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. if the county has
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an intellegent
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intellegent tution
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intelligent tuition
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, its economy will
enhace
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enhance
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intelligent
 generation will work in the future for the
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 and that will bring the
country
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 a brilliant economic status.
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 result
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poverty will end fastly.
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i
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thet
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that
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 from rich
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 to poor states
more
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are more
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 effective supply as we can consider
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these
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a long term impacts
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. in
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contract
contracts
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contract
contractm
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money
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donetions
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donations
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existance
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existence
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