Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

it is often argued that wealthy
countries
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with
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money
to
another states
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which are
suffring
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suffering
from poverty,
while
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but
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it is not
effective
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solution. and, these rich
countries
should
offers
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another kinds
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another kind
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of
supplies
to poor states. In
fact
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i
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totally agree with the previous
statment
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statement
. that
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developed
countries
should
provied
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provide
the
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poor
countiews
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countries
counties
with
others
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other
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effective
method
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methods
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than
money
donation
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donations
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. on one hand,
it is clear that
,
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money
donation has a
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effect. since the poor person doesn't have
the
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good mentality, how he can manage his
money
and recycle it to earn more
.
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however
, it is
good
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method for expressing the rich
countries
their
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attmpts
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attempts
towardes
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toward
the poor
country
by offering them
mony
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money
, but they should know
money
is not remain
as a result
of
awful
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managment
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management
of poor people.
for instance
, Japan after
nuclear
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war
it
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had been
destroied
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destroyed
completely but because they have been
worked
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working
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well
on
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their educational sectors. nowadays Japan from the
most rich
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richest
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country
over
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the
word
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world
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. because
the
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they
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used
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donations in the right sectors
on the other hand
, there are enormous methods development
countries
can offer
it's
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effective supply
with
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.
such
as technological
supplies
or educational
supplies
, as
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educational
supplies
are really crucial
,
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because the development of any
country
is rely on the
educations
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education
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. if the county has
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an intellegent
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intellegent tution
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intelligent tuition
rate
then
, its economy will
enhace
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enhance
rapidly. because the
intellegent
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intelligent
generation will work in the future for the
country
and that will bring the
country
a brilliant economic status.
as
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the
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result
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poverty will end fastly.
to conclude
,
i
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totally agree
with
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thet
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that
educational and technological
supplies
from rich
countries
to poor states
more
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are more
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effective supply as we can consider
theses
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these
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kinds of
supplies
as
a long term impacts
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a long term impact
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. in
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contract
contracts
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contract
contractm
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money
donetions
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donations
has
short term
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short-term
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existance
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existence
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