A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for to open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team summarise the benefits of playing for the concerts say how you think the company should spend the money

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am one of the employees working in the customer service department in your

company

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. I am writing

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letter to provide my opinion regarding how to spend money either on sponsoring the

children

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sports

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team or playing concerts in

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Eglinton

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of Toronto city. First of all, there are many benefits to sponsoring

children

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sports

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team

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teams

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. Mainly,

children

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can have a chance to play outdoor games which not only makes them physically strong but

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it helps to develop

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skills, which can

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help to opt for a professional career if the child becomes good at it.

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, by sponsoring

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, the

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would create a good reputation in the eyes of parents and the government, which indirectly elevates the growth of our firm. Now, if the

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would play concerts it attracts youngsters and teenage a lot in terms of leisure activities. Leisure time should be enjoyed by the public and a concert is a good option because music works as a therapy, it rejuvenates the human being. I personally believe it would be more beneficial for the

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to spend on the

children

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sports

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teams, by organising

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events, the cost of the coach, making a nice playground and

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building in

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area. I hope my feedback points will take into consideration. Thanking you, Yours faithfully, Denial Moore

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

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9 paragraphs

226 words

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