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Online education and training is becoming increasingly popular in the business ‎world.Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?‎

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Technology has taken the current world by storm. Every aspect of human life has been revolutionised today and
work
 from home is one of its examples. The
last
 pandemic sharply increased the usage of
this
 facility and there are definitely a lot of both, merits and demerits associated with it. We will discuss them in detail below and eventually,
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 will be sharing my opinion. First of all,
this
 remote set-up has enabled people to
work
 easily from their houses and it has brought a great impact on the
work
-life interface. Employees can manage their professional and personal lives together in
this
 way as it
also
 cuts down the travelling time and expedition
thus
 they now can spend more time with family and friends.
For example
, a current survey shows that 63% of respondents feel that they feel happy after online
work
 has been started.
Furthermore
, it decreases the expenditure of employers in multiple ways like less usage of electricity in the office leads to reduced bills.
Conversely
,
this
 system has numerous disadvantages too. Since there are no specific or bounded
work
 hours we can find a lack of punctuality in allies.
Along with
 ,that there is a loss of
work
 ethics in
this
 method as there is no proper office place and system available. There are more chances of mistakes and errors because there is often a lack of communication between members sitting at different places
as well as
 they forget to follow the hierarchy at times too. Employees ,
on the other hand
 , usually complain about working longer hours than usual and feeling less motivated
while
 working on important projects. In conclusion, considering both benefits and drawbacks, I will say that in my opinion working from agencies and workplaces are essential and better , it not only provides a professional atmosphere but
also
 trained people and hone professionalism in them.
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