The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
The table provides information about underground railway systems in six different cities.
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, the table shows the
year
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each railway opened, its length in kilometres, and the number of
passengers
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who use it each
year
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. It's clear that the three oldest railways are
also
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the longest and carry the most
passengers
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. London has the oldest underground, which started in 1863. It
also
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has the longest
route
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, with 394 kilometres.
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, it carries the third highest number of
passengers
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, at 775
million
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per
year
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, behind Paris and Tokyo. Paris, which opened in 1900, transports around 1,191,000,000 people annually over 199
km
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of track. Tokyo, despite opening in 1927, carries the most
passengers
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, at 1,927
million
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, even though its
route
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is only 155
km
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long. As for the other underground systems, Washington
DC
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, DC
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is the oldest, opening in 1976,
while
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Kyoto and Los Angeles opened in 1981 and
2001
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2001,
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respectively. Washington
DC
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, DC
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has a
route
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of 126
km
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and transports 144
million
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passengers
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each
year
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. Kyoto has the shortest
route
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, only 11
km
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, and the fewest
passengers
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, at 45
million
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.
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, Los Angeles has a
route
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of 28
km
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and 50
million
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passengers
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, passengers, route, million, km with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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