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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
The table shows data related to the underground railway systems in six different places. The pic gives us information about the year of creation, the route distance and the passengers carried each year by these underground systems.
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, the more modern they are, the shorter they are and the fewer people they carry. The oldest system is the London underground, it opened in 1863 and is
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 the largest one with 394 kilometres of route. The next chronologically is the one from Paris which was created in 1900, it has 199 kilometres but carries 1191 million passengers yearly. Even if the Tokyo railway is neither the oldest nor the longest, it is the one which carries the most people per year with a figure of 1921 million people. Modern ones are much shorter and more useful.
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, the Washington DC network is not that far from the older ones, having opened in 1976, has 126 kilometres and has an average of 144 million inhabitants yearly.
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, the newest is very different. It was made for Los Angeles in 2001 and it only has 28 km.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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