The diagram shows the different stages in the process of recycling waste paper by machine.

The diagram shows the different stages in the process of recycling waste paper by machine.
The diagram shows all the
steps
in
waste
paper
recycling, and it  divides
this
process into a total of 6
steps
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the  recycling of 
waste
paper
includes
steps
that involve human labour, heavy machinery and chemicals.   The process begins when
waste
paper
is collected from public
paper
banks and from businesses. and
then
 the
waste
paper
is sorted by hand. in
this
stage, the
paper
is graded and the unsuitable
paper
is removed. After the process of sorting has been completed, it is delivered to a
paper
mill.
The Next step is
cleaning.  upon reaching
this
stage, cleaning, pulping and removal of other materials
such
as staples are involved.
After
this
, inks and contaminants
such
as glue are removed from the
paper
.
Lastly
, in the stage of
paper
making machine, machine manufacture of usable
paper
.
finally
, we can get a recycling
paper
after six
steps
.
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