The diagram shows the different stages in the process of recycling waste paper by machine.

The diagram shows the different stages in the process of recycling waste paper by machine.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram shows the different stages in the process of recycling waste paper by machine.
The diagram shows all the
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in
waste
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paper
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recycling, and it  divides
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process into a total of 6
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Overall
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it is clear that
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 the  recycling of 
waste
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paper
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includes
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that involve human labour, heavy machinery and chemicals.   The process begins when
waste
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paper
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is collected from public
paper
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banks and from businesses. and
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 the
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paper
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is sorted by hand. in
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stage, the
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is graded and the unsuitable
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is removed. After the process of sorting has been completed, it is delivered to a
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mill.
The Next step is
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cleaning.  upon reaching
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stage, cleaning, pulping and removal of other materials
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as staples are involved.
After
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this
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, inks and contaminants
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as glue are removed from the
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Lastly
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, in the stage of
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making machine, machine manufacture of usable
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finally
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, we can get a recycling
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after six
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words steps, waste, paper with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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