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Some people believe that the government should help the unemployed or just laid off from work on a weekly basis. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, an increasing number of unemployed. It makes many families suffer from economic problems. Some
people
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 argue that the
government
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 should take action in
order
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 to help the unemployed or just
laid
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 off from work on a weekly basis. In fact, I strongly agree that
government
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 should give a hand to the unemployed for two main reasons. The main reason is to help
society
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's economic problems. Many
people
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 feel difficult to
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 their daily needs. It is hard for them to find jobs
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 the availability of job vacancies. By offering some jobs, citizens can have big opportunities to change their lives.
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, the
government
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 opens recruitment for fresh graduates in
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 to reduce the number of unemployment.
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, economic growth will increase. The following reason is it is a must for the
government
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 to help
society
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 as citizens already paid their taxes. It is believed that money that
people
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 spend on their country will give them benefits.
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, the
government
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 can use the money to help
people
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 in need
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 as by offering capital for citizens to start small businesses. By giving venture capital,
society
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 can have regular income in
order
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 to
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 its basic needs. For illustration, a lower-class family can have the opportunity to put their children to school because they already have a monthly income from their small business.
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,
people
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 can have better lives.
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, it is becoming increasingly difficult for
society
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 to find jobs.
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, many
people
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 think that the
government
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 should take action in
order
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 to help nonemployment. I am firmly convinced that helping nonemployment will bring positive effects
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 as helping
people
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 to have better lives and increasing the economic rate growth of a country.

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