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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more to encourage people to consume less sugar. do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include relevent examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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There is an opinion that
the
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food and beverages
contain
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containing
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 added
sugar
has
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have
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negative
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a negative
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 influence on
human’s
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human
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 health.
Peoples
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People
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 should choose products
contain
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that contain
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 natural
sugar
for
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to
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 decrease
sugar
 consumption
level
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levels
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. I totally agree with the statement and strongly believe that many of us should take
under
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apply
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control of what
they
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we
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 eat. Sugars are
a
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apply
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simple carbohydrate that provides
calories
 for your body to use as energy. They are divided
on
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into
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 two categories: first
one
 is
natural
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a natural
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sugar
 found in whole, unprocessed foods
such
 as fruit, vegetables, dairy, and some grains.
Second
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one
 is added
sugar
 found in processed foods and drinks. It
also
 includes
sugar
 you add to foods at home. Added
sugar
 provides little to no nutritional value but much energy value because
sugar
 itself is high in
calories
.
According to
 scientific research eating food and drink products
contain
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that contain
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 high levels of
sugar
 can lead to health problems
for example
 obesity, type 2 diabetes, and heart disease.
Hence
 to reduce risks associated with high
level
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levels
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 of
sugars
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sugar
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 everyone should replace added
sugar
by
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with
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 food containing natural
one
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ones
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.
This
 means that we would feel the taste of sweetness which has
impact
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an impact
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one
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on
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 our mood, but without no harm to
health
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our health
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 by adding extra
calories
.
Personally
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,Personally
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 I have
an
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apply
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experience in cutting up candy, baked goods, and dairy desserts and stopped drinking juices. At
first
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,first
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 it seemed to me that I became more hungry and felt a lack of sweets But
then
 I added more fresh fruits and dried fruits and
situation
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the situation
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 changed. After
few
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a few
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 weeks I lost 5 kilograms
began
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and began
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 to feel better. In
conclusion
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 I want to admit that many people love
sugar
 and eat too much of it.
However
, for staying healthy all of us should limit
ours
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our
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 added
sugar
 to no more
10
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than 10
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% of
your
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our
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 total daily
calories
.
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