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In modern societies, more and more people choose to live on their own. What are the reasons people choose to do this? Is it a positive or negative trend?

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In modern communities, increasingly individuals choose to live on their own. There are many reasons why
people
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 in recent times prefer to live sole including, learn responsibility,
less
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and less
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 noise,
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, I believe
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 a negative trend because
make
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makes
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people
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 suffer mentally and financially. On the one hand, The primary reason why
people
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 choose to live alone is to learn responsibility. To illustrates,
people
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 will learn cooking, washing, and
pay
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paying
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 bills of electricity and water.
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,
people
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 will develop valuable skills namely, independence,
financial-management
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financial management
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,
adaptability
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and adaptability
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 to live alone. Less noise is another reason why more and more
people
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 choose to live on their own. In
the
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apply
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other words,
people
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 who live alone can have
quiet
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a quiet
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 place away from family conflicts , which means
people
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 can
less
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be less
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 vulnerable to stress and anxiety.
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, In my opinion, living alone can have a negative
impacts
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impact
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 on individuals mentally and financially. Regarding
mentally
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mental
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,
people
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 who live solo are more likely to get mental health issues namely, depression, and anxiety.
This
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 is because
people
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 who live alone spend a
consierable
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considerable
 amount of time with
themseleve
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themselves
 without interaction with other
people
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. When it comes to
financially
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finances
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, living alone can
is
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be
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 uneconomical.
This
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 is
due to
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 the fact that,
people
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 who select to live alone ful responsible about pay for their basic needs, rent of
apartment
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apartments
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, electricity, and water, which means more financial burden on
people
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 who decide to live alone.
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, In my perspective, There are different reasons why increasingly individuals choose to live on their own in recent times including,
people
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want
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who want
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 to develop
sense
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a sense
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 of responsibility,
free
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and free
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 noise,
however
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, I think
this
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a
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is a
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negative trend because
make
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makes
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people
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 struggle mentally and financially.
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