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Some people believe online reading material should be only be used for child to learn to read, whereas others belive only printed material should be used. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Proponents believe that reading content online is good for offspring to learn
whereas
 opponents argued that only printed material is suitable for them. As far as I am concerned, printed records and magazines are more suitable for
children
 as the parents can evaluate what statements are suitable for their scion and boost their concentration level. On one side of the argument, some hold the view that online media provides broader
knowledge
 to
children
.
For instance
,
books
 only provide limited
knowledge
according to
 the content
whereas
 online materials can able to access unlimited sources of
knowledge
 without needing to spend money to buy the record. Another major reason is that the heir can not only able to gain
knowledge
 from reading but
also
 capture cutting-edge computer technology. Despite the above arguments,
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 take the view that physical
books
 are more beneficial to
children
 as the publisher is allowed to publish if the contents are suitable for the reader.
Moreover
, only knowledgeable
books
 are collected by the library which the
children
 can able to access . One major reason is that reading
books
 boost the
children
's concentration level helping to increase their cognitive development, and they can bookmark the useful information in the
books
 physically which they can able to read back anytime. In conclusion, though both views are commonly held in today's society, my personal option is that physical
books
 are the most suitable for
children
 as the
books
 are evaluated carefully by the publisher prior to release which provides only useful information to the
children
 and reading printed
books
 promote concentration level which helps the
children
's cognitive development.
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