Mrs Barret an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barret. In your letter •Suggest how you could help in her home •say why you would like to do this work •explain when you will and will not be available

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Dear Mrs Barret I am writing about your advertisement which is published in the local newspaper. As a young student, I would be glad to help you with your household activities during the summer. I would like to mention the various tasks that I could help you with.

Firstly

, I can tutor your young children and teach them some basic lessons via playing which will help them when at school.

Secondly

, I am a good cook and I am able to prepare healthy dishes for you and your family. I would be grateful if you could give me a chance to help you in your home

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because we live on the same street and I can walk to your place.

Also

, I am studying ‘’ Early Childhood Education’’ at university and spending some time with your children would be a valuable experience for me. I would be free the whole summer except the second week of August. It is my birthday week and I prefer to travel to my home town to celebrate my birthday with my family and friends. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Sincerely, Negar Sedigh

Submitted by Negar_seddigh on Mon May 27 2024

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Consider being more specific about the tasks you can help with, such as mentioning specific household chores.

coherence cohesion

Improve the transitions between paragraphs to enhance the flow of your letter.

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You provided a clear explanation of your availability and the reason for it.

suitable writing tone

Your letter has a polite and appropriate tone.

greeting and closing

You included closing and greeting phrases effectively.

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

192 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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