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Some people think that teenagers should do some unpaid work in the local community. Some people believe that it benefit both young people and society as a whole. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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There are split opinions regarding the unpaid
work
 that has been done for the local
community
. Some
people
 believe that it should be done by teenagers,
whereas
 another group of thinkers and I support young
people
 and society's need to participate in
this
 kind of activity as well. My inclination is justified in the following paragraphs. Examining the former opinion, The primary argument the supporters would put forward is that age matters.
This
 is because most teenagers have no responsibility at that age and their free time needs to be put in good ways
in addition
 to making them understand the reality of society.
In addition
, they
also
 believe that children will start to understand the value of money and can
also
 support their families financially. The reason is some of the voluntary
work
 pay a little amount of money to appreciate labourers.
However
, it can not be overlock the other side too. Out of all the arguments, the strongest one to prove my opinion is getting the experience by doing
such
 type of
work
 can help young
people
 in their workplace.
This
 is to say
people
 can join that type of
work
 which can help in the future to make their carrier. A good example of
this
 is free camp. Young doctors are basically doing voluntary
work
 by camping free in cities or villages. It does not even give a good opportunity to the
community
 to get free treatment but
also
 helps doctors to meet with different types of patience and gain more practical knowledge.
To conclude
 and voice my opinion, I would say that participating in the local
community
work
 by young
as well as
 by society is the most ideal way to gain experience and make the local
community
 a better place to live. In the big picture, it is a great opportunity for everyone.
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