Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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It is believed that the different medications and curative treatments are being tried by increasing
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people
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of seeing a
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it has some positive
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negative impacts of new
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of
treatment
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are trying traditional
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think it is a positive approach.
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yoga,different kind of herbs and healthy food.Since
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it was recently reported that modern drugs and medicines may cure a disease but cause but have other
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sideffects
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side-effects
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herbal medications do not have any kind of
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side effects
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,yoga reduces stress level,increases focus ,improve
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system and boost
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imune
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immune
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people
should try different
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of
treatment
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the guidance of experts.
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doctor
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doctors
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ways
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treatment
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very much effective.
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,in case of any emergency situation
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treatments
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as operations,vaccinations and medications are far better
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the
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traditional
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the traditional
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of
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trational
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traditional
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of
treatment
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are
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too slow as
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to modern
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doctors are qualified
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surgeons
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know how to handle any situation.So,when
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limit is short
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doctor
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way
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best choice rather than all of the other methods.
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people
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should not quit visiting
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doctor
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doctors
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completly
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completely
. To recapitulate,in my
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both
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ways
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of
treatments
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treatment
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have some positive and negative effects.As
,
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doctors
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methods are quick but have
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sideffects
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side effects
but traditional
ways
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are slow but do not have
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sideffects
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side effects
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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