The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shop that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shop that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
The line graph shows the
number
of shop closers and openings in a given country. The chart records data from 2011 to 2018; both categories experience a dramatic decrease in different years. In 2011, the
number
of new open
shops
recorded the highest
score
of 8,500, which is 2,000 higher than the
number
of closer
shops
in the same
year
.
However
, the
number
of
shops
opening dropped sharply in the following
year
, almost half the
last
year
's
number
. After that, through 2014, the
number
of opening
shops
increased steadily to 6,100 and downward. In the
last
year
of analysis, the
score
ended with 3,000, the lowest
score
.
On the other hand
, in terms of the
number
of closings, started at 6,500 and remained stable until 2014, but in 2015, the
score
bottomed out with the lowest
score
in the research period, 500. After that experience, the figure turned to plateau till the final
year
of research;
at the end
of the
year
, the
score
is 5,100, which is higher than the
number
of openings in the same period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops, score, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graph
  • Number
  • Shops
  • Closed
  • Opened
  • Fluctuation
  • Increase
  • Comparison
  • Trend
  • Period
  • Overall
  • Summarize
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