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Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance such as food and housing. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

#countries #refugees #assistance #food
People from undeveloped
countries
 who flee as immigrants should be accepted by high-income
countries
 since They have abilities to provide basic
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 and better opportunities to
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such
 as food and
accomodation
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accommodation
. I disagree with
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 opinion
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 since those rich
countries
 have
burden
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the burden
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 to take care
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 citizens as well. I will discuss why rich
nation
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nations
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 should not accept more
refugees
 If developed
countries
 accept
refugees
 to be their population, they have to give substantive assistance for
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 the right to work, to health, and to education
refugees
 can start productive lives in their host
countries
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 mean they have to spend a lot of assistance budget to do
this
. For sure,rich
nation
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 have
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 money to take care
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 but that budget is not enough to solve all of
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 in
country
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.
That is
 the reason why rich
nation
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 should not accept
immigrant
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immigrants
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. The other reason why wealthy nations should not offer help to the
refugees
 since these escapees always come from violent or war counties
this
 is lead to
build
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 conflict to host
countries
 that they flee to if
that
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countries
 do not policy to educate how to integrate with
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.
Consequently
, host states increasingly struggle with issues like a high crime rate
,
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 and unemployment. In conclusion, Many people think wealthy nations should accept
refugees
 and provide basic assistance to them but
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 opinion, Those
countries
 should not accept them since they can lead to so many problems to our county
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Refugees
  • Asylum seekers
  • Humanitarian aid
  • Integration
  • Multiculturalism
  • Economic impact
  • Public services
  • International law
  • Conventions relating to the status of refugees
  • Labor market
  • Cultural enrichment
  • Burden-sharing
  • Resettlement programs
  • Host country
  • Border security
  • Comprehensive policy
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