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Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What are thae main effects of this epidemic?

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Today more
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 are overweight than ever before is becoming more widespread in many parts these days.
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 eat too much fast food with high calories, too much sweets.
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, when life is busy, most students or young
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 choose fast food as pizzas, hamburgers, fried chicken, and milk teas… replace a main meal. Another contributing factor to mention is the lack of physical training, seldom exercises physical.
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, some
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 are not interested in doing exercises, laziness is pervasive, most of them
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 like when they do exercises
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 and
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 care about their bodies. Unexpectedly, there are some to be taken into consideration. The first and most important is that easy to disease heart
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 and get high cholesterol, maybe be a reason to reduce life expectancy.
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, when some
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 are overweight, they can get easy to diseases of heart compared with
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don’t
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 overweight, or when they are overweight they will get high cholesterol in their blood. Another effect no less important is that they
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 have well built.
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, if they are overweight they will
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 maybe say oversize compared to
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 who are well-built. In conclusion, being overweight is a big problem that affects a lot of
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 nowadays. It’s mainly caused by the daily routine eat and doing exercise. From what has been discussed, overweight it is advised that
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 need to reduce their use of fast food, and high more exercise.

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