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write a report describing the information in the chart below. Write at least 150 words.

#report #information
The provided bar chart represents the
number
 of sandwich spread
peanut
butter
 and jelly purchased at a supermarket from 2012 to 2016 and the data is not calibrated in percentage form.
Overall
 ,both the
jars
 of
peanut
butter
 and jelly
shows
Correct subject-verb agreement
show
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the
Correct article usage
an
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 upward Trend in 4 years ,on regular bases.
To begin
with
Add a comma
,with
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comma
Add an article
a comma
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 the
number
 of
peanut
butter
jars
 continuously increased from 2012 to 2014 and reach the highest
number
. But in 2015 visa a great fall in it, the
number
 of
jars
 decreased from 70 to 50.
Whereas
, in 2016 a sudden growth is noted in
peanut
butter
jars
 from 50 to 90.
Besides
 , in
case
Correct article usage
the case
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 of
number
Change the article
a number
the number
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 of jelly
jars
Add a comma
,jars
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 there is
also
 a regular increment
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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shown from 2012 to 2014.
While
 in 2015 it file down with minor numbers. But in 2016 it shows
a
Change the article
an
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 instant upward trend and reach the greatest point
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 is from 70 to 110.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graph, chart, axis, period, timeframe
  • Trend, increase, decrease, growth, decline
  • Stability, plateau, fluctuate, variability, inconsistency
  • Peak, trough, milestone, threshold, benchmark
  • Significant, considerable, marginal, slight, dramatic
  • Explanation, influence, factor, contribution, correlation
  • Projection, forecast, anticipate, predict
  • Surpass, exceed, fall below, remain constant, maintain
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