Unhealthy eating has a negative effect on both individuals and the society in which they live. Some people think that the government should tax unhealthy foods while others believe that a “fat tax” is unfair and unnecessary. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

As nowadays people are eating more and more fast
food
which creates an unhealthy
body
which can harm both individuals
as well as
society. Increasing
tax
on fast
food
will create some effect but has two sides good and bad. My viewpoint and opinion are discussed below.
Firstly
, if a government will take more
tax
from fast
food
then
it
have
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teo
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two
impacts. The country should provide information about keeping a
body
fit and fine. The country should give knowledge to a school about
good
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the good
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body
.
For example
,
by
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giving
knowlehge
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knowledge
about proper diet will help
to
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countries.
Secondly
, the benefits side of
this
is
a
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public will eat less junk fruits. My young group will eat
then
it has
great
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impact on a nation
also
. The young children's
body
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bodies
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will be good
then
it is better for
a
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the
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nation.
Thirdly
, the disadvantage side is that
a rich groups
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a rich group
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can
afort
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effort
afford
a fort
but poor groups will fill hard to buy. If
state
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the state
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will ask for high
tax
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taxes
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then
poor
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the poor
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a society will face difficulty.
For example
,
country
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a country
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like a
germany
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Germany
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have
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good health which
help
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helps
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both population and
community
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the community
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also
. In conclusion, if a government wont to reduce unhealthy
food
then
should spread awareness among people
such
as ' stay away from unhealthy
food
and your health will be good. There will be some impacts if a government ask for high
tax
but it has
also
disadvantage too.
Hence
, sparking awareness is more important than imposing
Fat
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tax
,
thus
my viewpoint and my opinion
are discuss
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in the above data.
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