The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
This
chart explains to the reader the answers to surveys asking guests how satisfied they were with their visit to Ashdown Museum the year
before and the year
after the renovation.
Firstly
, a year
ago before the refurbishment, 15% per cent
of visitors are very satisfied with their trip to Ashdown Museum. However
, after redecoration is 20 per cent
more than the year
before the restoration.
Secondly
, the percentage of dissatisfied communities sharply fell down by 25 per cent
. Although
we can see many ups and downs in the chart, surprisingly the number of people who wouldn’t prefer to answer is the same before and after the remaking.
Thirdly
, the amount of society whom they vote satisfied with their tour of the Ashdown Museum is 10 percent
more than the Change the spelling
per cent
year
before the renovation.
All in all, we can understand from the chart there is a 5 per cent
fall down in the very dissatisfied part before the refurbishment.Submitted by muratulun on
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