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Nowadays, many parents believe that organizing supplementary classes for their children is an extremely effective way to improve their children's academic performance at school.

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Nowadays, many parents believe that organizing supplementary classes for their
children
 is an extremely effective way to improve their
children
's academic performance at
school
.
That is
 why most
students
 attend extra lessons after their study hours and
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 their leisure time. Personally, I strongly believe that
this
 is a worthwhile thing for two reasons;
firstly
, it helps
children
 to improve their academic performance at
school
, and
secondly
, it reduces the statistics of
students
 who fail exams. It is obvious that these days,
children
 whose grades at
school
 are terrible may have worries about their future and life. Thankfully for them, there are so many options like online courses and education centres where they can change their attitudes towards studies and improve their grades
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 math, biology, and other subjects.
For instance
, in Kazakhstan, schoolers who are going to graduate from secondary education have to pass several complicated exams as they are prominent to apply
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 universities of dreams.
Therefore
, Razakh graduates are going to additional classes after their
school
 and at the weekends in order to increase their grades
at
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 their main subjects and pass the tests with flying colours to receive scholarships.
Secondly
, it would be better for governments if all their
students
 were gone to the extra lessons, as in the future they could assist their birthplaces and work there, constructing intriguing plans.
Furthermore
, it can
also
 reduce the number of pupils' failures and minimise troublesome teenagers, as they will study with other disciplined classmates and learn from them useful information and abilities. In conclusion, I hope that one day
students
 will understand the
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 of education and start to attitude better
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 their study lessons.
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