The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
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The diagram illustrates the procedure used to make instant
noodles
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it is clear that
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there are eight stages, beginning with storage silos and ending with labelling and sealing. The process has six main phases, namely mixing raw materials, producing
dough
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strips, making
noodles
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discs, cooking, drying, and packaging. The first stage of the process is flour kept in storage silos and transported to the manufacturing centre by truck.
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the next stage, it is combined with water and oil in a big mixer to create
dough
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.
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the
dough
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passes through several rollers and produces
dough
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strips, after
that
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the
dough
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is shaped into
noodles
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discs, which is followed by cooking with oil, cooling and drying them. In the following stage,
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is followed by adding vegetables and spices into cups.
Finally
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, all cups full of prepared
noodles
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are labelled and
also
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sealing through the use of a labelling machine.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words noodles, dough with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • mixing ingredients
  • dough preparation
  • sheeting
  • steaming
  • cutting techniques
  • dehydration
  • deep-frying
  • cooling system
  • packaging
  • quality control
  • production line
  • mass production
  • food preservation
  • convenience food
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