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Many famous sports players advertise sports products. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#sports #players #products #outweigh
Although
products
 are advertised by famous
athletes
,
while
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they
intorduce
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introduce
 different items. In my opinion, I consider that advertisement can bring more advantages for
products
 compared to any issues it might bring. Despite the drawbacks below, I strongly believe that advertising
products
 get attention,
famous
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and famous
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athletes
 will
imposed
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 it on social media and trading applications. In
this
 case, the visibility will get bigger which means the views of the
products
 will rise. Famous
athletes
 are well known on social media and they
considered
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as
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apply
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models
and
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people are
admire
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by
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for
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 their
achivment
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achievement
achievements
,which will influence others to buy
products
.
Advertisement
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 lead to increase
the
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sales and marketing which come out with benefits to the companies or shops. Admittedly, there are some problems involved
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in athletes
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athletes
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athletes'
athlete's
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 famous
advertise
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advertising
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some
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of some
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 items. To illustrate, influencers
are order
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are ordered
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 high
salary
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salaries
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 to do marketing for any product, which means small shops or companies can not afford it
,
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 because they are facing financial difficulties. When famous
athletes
 do
advertisement
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advertisements
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 without checking the quality of
product
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the product
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 it will be harmful
for
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 consumers because
they
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arethey
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 totally convinced and confident by what the influencer
impos
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imposed
,
while
the
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famous
Athletes
 are
concerne
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concerned
 only about
money
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the money
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which
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they earn. In conclusion, the critical
lessons
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lesson
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that
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is that
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 famous
athletes
 do not concern about
products
 they concern only about their money. If they advertise for the quality they would be more famous
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endorsement
  • influence
  • credibility
  • reputation
  • globalize
  • brand image
  • penetrate markets
  • role model
  • participation
  • high costs
  • premium pricing
  • overshadow
  • product features
  • consumer trust
  • reputation risk
  • scandal
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