Many famous sports players advertise sports products. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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products
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are advertised by famous
athletes
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,
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while
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they
intorduce
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introduce
different items. In my opinion, I consider that advertisement can bring more advantages for
products
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compared to any issues it might bring. Despite the drawbacks below, I strongly believe that advertising
products
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get attention,
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and famous
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athletes
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will
imposed
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it on social media and trading applications. In
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case, the visibility will get bigger which means the views of the
products
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will rise. Famous
athletes
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are well known on social media and they
considered
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as
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apply
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models
and
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people are
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by
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for
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their
achivment
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achievement
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,which will influence others to buy
products
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.
Advertisement
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Advertisements
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lead to increase
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sales and marketing which come out with benefits to the companies or shops. Admittedly, there are some problems involved
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in athletes
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athletes
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famous
advertise
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some
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of some
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items. To illustrate, influencers
are order
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are ordered
are ordering
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high
salary
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salaries
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to do marketing for any product, which means small shops or companies can not afford it
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because they are facing financial difficulties. When famous
athletes
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do
advertisement
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advertisements
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without checking the quality of
product
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the product
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it will be harmful
for
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to
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consumers because
they
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arethey
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totally convinced and confident by what the influencer
impos
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imposed
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the
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famous
Athletes
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are
concerne
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concerned
only about
money
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the money
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which
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they earn. In conclusion, the critical
lessons
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that
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is that
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famous
athletes
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do not concern about
products
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they concern only about their money. If they advertise for the quality they would be more famous
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endorsement
  • influence
  • credibility
  • reputation
  • globalize
  • brand image
  • penetrate markets
  • role model
  • participation
  • high costs
  • premium pricing
  • overshadow
  • product features
  • consumer trust
  • reputation risk
  • scandal
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