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You have recently organized an event at a restaurant. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: • Give details about the event and how it went; • Tell how you were pleased with the restaurant’s service; • Suggest some improvements the restaurant could make. Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ....,

#event #restaurant #manager #restaurant’s #service #improvements #addresses
Dear Sir, I hope
this
 letter finds you in best of the spirits and radiant health. I am writing
this
 letter to applaud you for hosting my
firms'
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firm's
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 event successfully
last
 week. It was the annual event of
company
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the company
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, which we organize for all the
distributers
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distributors
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 and the staff members. I am very impressed with your staff's conduct and
way
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the way
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 they handled all the guests. I would like to use
this
 opportunity to praise you for the variety you offer
in
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 the menu
that is
 liked by all the audience.
Moreover
, the food quality and service
was
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were
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 worth appreciating.
Lastly
, one of your staff members Mr. Rajesh helped me in every way possible to make
this
 event a grand success and I thank him for that.
However
, there
is
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 still a few improvements that you can make.
Firstly
, the sound system did meet the expectations.
Secondly
, the decoration theme was
also
 not up to mark. But, my
overall
 experience was a memorable one and I will
definately
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definitely
 consider
this
 place for hosting future events. I hope my remarks are useful to you and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jatinder.
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grammar
Revise your letter for small grammatical errors and typos. For example, "did meet" should be "did not meet" and "definately" should be "definitely."
clarity
Consider breaking down complex sentences to make them clearer. For instance, the first paragraph could be split into two sentences for better readability.
task achievement
The letter is detailed and covers all required points, making it an effective response to the task.
tone
The overall tone of the letter is polite and appreciative, which is suitable for the purpose of the letter.
structure
The logical structure of the letter is strong, with clear separation of different ideas into paragraphs.
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