A recent newspaper article reports that a 14 year old boy, who seriously damaged his school, got a punishment to clean streets instead of being sent to the prison. Do you think young criminals should be sent to prison or should alternative forms of punishment be used?

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It can see an upward trend for youth crime in many countries, which has caught the public's attention.

Therefore

advocates opine that it is better to put teen offenders behind bars.

However

, from my perspective, there are better measures to punish juvenile criminals,

instead

of imprisonment. Alternative punitive methods like community service are more effective than confinement if young offenders are strictly supervised. Juveniles have a highly impressionable mind and they easily get influenced by their companies.

For example

, they are more likely to be accompanied by adult criminals who are professional and experienced in jail,

therefore

they may be induced to commit

severer

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crimes later.

Moreover

, they are at an exceptionally high risk of getting treated violently

while

serving a sentence. Jail terms may harden

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convict

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against society

as a result

of the brutal treatment they might receive.

Consequently

, it might not be the most effective way to reform juvenile criminals.

By contrast

, if the young law-breakers can serve the community rather than being imprisoned, they are able to embrace an opportunity to rehabilitate.

On the other hand

, after being published for breaking laws, they will have second thoughts before

recommitting

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crimes.

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, a criminal record can make

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difficult to land a decent job after being released, which, in a bid to make a living, could be a major contributor to reoffending. After all the aim of the punishment per se is to deter the youth from engaging in delinquencies and violating laws, which should be implemented wisely. In conclusion, juveniles are too young to have a deep understanding of the repercussions of criminal acts, most of which

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are hormone-fueled and unintentional

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are worth forgiving. Under no circumstance do we take the prison sentence as the only way to prevent juvenile crimes, yet more alternatives should be taken into consideration.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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