The two bar charts give information about the proportion of obesity in boys and girs between the ages of 12 and 19 by nationality in the United States for the two decades (2010 and 2014)

The two bar charts give information about the

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of obesity in

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and

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girls

between the ages of 12 and 19 by nationality in the United States for

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two decades (2010 and 2014). A glance at the graph reveals that the percentage of obese

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and

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increased by 2014,

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risk. Among

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, the

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of obesity was similar for

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White,

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at 12%, 11% and 13% respectively in the first decade. In 2014, these rates increased to 17%, 20% and 27% for the same nationalities. In

girls

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, the

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of obesity was almost similar to

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Non-Hispanic

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White and

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at 9% and 12% respectively in 2004. It is obvious there was the highest share (16%) for

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Black

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year. The two mentioned above data of ethnicity rise by 5%,

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of Black

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climbed to 29% in the second decade.