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People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug use by young people in modern day society. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse.

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In a recent situation,
drugs
 have spread widely over the country. Many societies use those medicine not only for health but
also
 for their happiness. It will be a bad impact on the teenager. I think parental guidance and school education are important to solve
this
 situation. The young community are the future generation that will develop the country. Their parents must save them from any bad influence, especially from narcotics. There are two types of
drugs
 which are legal and illegal pills. Legal
drugs
 can be found in drugstore and it is for medicine but illegal
drugs
 is dangerous and can make addicted. Many people use that illegal
drugs
 only for their happiness without remembering their health condition. Illegal
drugs
 can give the worst impact, which is death. Sometimes, teenager feels so tired of their life and
then
 some people give a bad influence to use illegal
drugs
 to forget their problems. It must stop because it will make addicted to illegal
drugs
 and give bad conditions for their health. The parental guide is important to keep their
children
 from drug abuse. Parents must control every activity of their
children
 and talk to their
children
. Education in school must provide the dangers of narcotics, so it will be preventive action to make
children
 know the bad impacts of illegal
drugs
. We must stop the bad influence of narcotics on the young generation because they are the next future leader. Without the teenager, we can not change the world to be better. Let us reject illegal
drugs
.
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